those thoughts that make their way to the outer edges of my brain, put to 'paper' in the hopes of easing the anxiety and self-doubt that bubble just below the surface
Monday, January 9, 2012
Thoughtfall
Steps brisk and breaths quick,
The snow whispers soothingly,
Thoughts swirl like flakes.
I tried to comment on this a couple of days ago, but forgot my blog info, so had to wait. I like the juxtaposition of snow falling and thoughts swirling, really nice. If I were to suggest anything, it would be to leave off, "like flakes," in the last line. Flakes already established by the fact it's snowing. Thanks for sharing this with me, hope you don't mind the critique.
I tried to comment on this a couple of days ago, but forgot my blog info, so had to wait.
ReplyDeleteI like the juxtaposition of snow falling and thoughts swirling, really nice. If I were to suggest anything, it would be to leave off, "like flakes," in the last line. Flakes already established by the fact it's snowing. Thanks for sharing this with me, hope you don't mind the critique.
Gary/ soji
I think it is very interesting
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